Space 2008 Issue 2: Building a Community of Writers
Posted on May 1, 2008 by msresourcenetwork
Don’t take me away…
Please.
It’s my only place
to forget the past,
and move on…
Just THAT place.
That SINGLE place.
That each and everyday,
creates a new
shining star,
and a silver turning point,
in my life.
-From My Shining Star, Giselle 8th Grade Maryland
The words unfold, the images stir, the ideas and thoughts and dreams of students across the United States pour onto the pages of Space 2008 Issue 2.
Please read and reflect on the writing of students from Lovett and these other schools, and leave your comments for them here on this post. You can reference their writing (title of work, author) and they will come read and comment back here.
Enjoy!
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I went to this website and I read Simply Me by Jonathan P in Bronx, NY. I also read Where I am From by Genaro in Bronx, NY. I thought it was interesting to read other people’s poems who are around my age. These two poems that I read were very much like the I am From poems we wrote in English. Ours were a little bit longer, ours were six stanzas. We also have a blog in English where we post our writing. My blog address is http://gracies.learnerblogs.org/
I read two poems, one was from Elizabeth from Bronx NY, this one was good, but wasn’t exactly well-written, but the point ut across and the things she described was still very good. The other poem I read was called Ending, this week. by Lindsea in 11th grade from Hawaii. THis poem i thought was scary, but interesting, it was well-written as well. I thought it was cool to read other peoples comments from around the country.
I went to the website and read some poems from the other kids from around the world. Two of the poems I read were Simply, Me by Jonathan P who lives in Bronx, NY and Ending This Week by Lindsea who is in the 11th grade in Hawaii. These poems were a lot like the I Am From poems that we wrote but theirs were also different because they were shorter than ours and ours were more happy and there’s were kind of weird and sad but also funny.
I read two peoms and they were both by Lindsea from Hawaii. I have say they were kind of weird. I did not understand the fetus part as well as the sphncter. Thsi was really weird and I admit it was a waste of thirty econds of my life. Overall your second peom I read was good and liked the rap you did. Keep up the good work.
I read two poems, I Am, by Elizabeth from The Bronx, and Where I’m From, by Genaro, from The Bronx. Both poems were good. They were descriptive and described either the writer or their families. Overall I thought that both poems were very good.
Hey, thanks for putting part of my poem in your website! I really like the website my english teacher created. I like it because different people from my school including me can post a bunch of awesome and unique poems. The great thing about that, is that everyone gets to see what people in my grade have worked on, and so i think that this opens up new windows for people who are interested in writing poems and other things too. What I think that students can benefit from the website is that they can get used to showing all of their creativity and they also can learn how to display the work that they have done by putting it on a website for everyone to see. Another reason why it is a great idea, is because people can post comments on student’s work, and leave feedback on the things that they make. People from all over the place will take part in the website and help students write better, and improve their skills by leaving comments and letting them know what to change in their work. So thanks again for putting my poem in your website!! I appreciate it. Thank ya.
Just to get this off my mind by Allyson 8th grde Maryland
I thought your poem was very inspiring. I thought all the issuses in your poem were all very true. Keep writing, your doing great! I enjoyed reading your poem.
~emmala
I read Allyson from Maryland’s poem. I thought that it was really good and I understand what you mean about girls and guys being friends. I thought that your poem was really good and i liked it a lot. The other poem i read was by Giselle from Maryland’s poem. I dont really understand the poem, but i thought the writting was good and it was a very creative poem.
-Kate
I read two poems. First i read the poem titled If You Cared by GiselleThis poem had very good descriptions and good adjectives. I really liked how this poem had a lot of feeling and emotion. Good job! I also read I Am from Elizabeth. I like how the poem was just about you. I really liked this poem, because of teh way it flowed. I think overall the poems I read were very good!
Scanned, darkly by Lindsea
I enjoyed looking at your art. I liked it because it left me wanting to know more. That is a good quality for an artist to have. I think you did a great job with this piece. How did you make it?
~emmala
I read a total of two peoples, the first was Simply Me by Jonathan P. I thought this poem was very creative and well thoughout. It was very interesting and captured my attention. The second poem i read was Existential Vacuum by Lindsea in 11th grade in Hawaii. This poem was very interesting because it brought up alot of different views and subjects. I thought it was very well thoughout, Lindsea must have really thought out what she read. it was very good.
I read I Am by Elizabeth from the Bronx. I also read Where I’m From by Genero fro the Bronx. Both poems were great. I really enjoyed reading these pieces of writing. They really reminded me of my home. Also, we did something of the sort. Once again, Good Job!!!
I read “My Shining Star” by Giselle an eighth grader in Maryland. I think your poem is really nice. It had a magical feel to it. I loved all the similes you used. It really made the poem alive. I loved it! I hope you keep writing!
Hi, I watched Eliwood by Gabrielle and Temujin. This video was very sad which made it really good! It must have been difficult to do something like that! I loved the illistrations also. Great Job! Can’t wait to view more.
i read “just to get thiss off my nid” by allyson
i thought it was very interesting… but i know what your saying allyson
i have a guy friend and everyone thinks we like eachother but we dont
i like this poem becuase i can relate to it and i see that you needed to get something off your mind and vent
good job on it!
i read stereotypes by patricia
i thought this was a good poem because i could relate to it
i think that every teen in school knows how it is to have to be in a group and always being classified as that
you did a good job with explaining youself!
I read a short story called burning pain. It was really good but also very sad. I thought that it was very emotional. I also watched a movie called eliwood. That was a good movie and very imaginative.
i am cory and i read Existential Vacuum by Lindsea
I thought that was interesting how you considered it as a mask. It was good and i liked it. Keep on writing
Elizabeth title: Poem
I love your poem! it is marvelous! I think yo did a really good job! Thta is so cool that is got in the magazine! I really like your last line! it was very good! You are a great poem writer!
I read The memories and memories and really liked how they mentioned their familys in both memoirs. I like this because it shows that their family is very important to them. I also rad another thinng and clicked on a link to games, he had a cool picture of a dawg playing chess.
I read Where I’m From
I thought that it was very good and i liked how descriptive it was.
Just to get this off my mind by ALyson was really good and well written and creative. good job
I read “I Am From” by Elizabeth from Bronx, NY. I thought it was really good and creative. We also written poems just like that and I can related to what you were trying to say.
I read my shinning star!
I thought it was very good!
I read Skiing by Sam, a sixth grader at Norris Elementary School in Southampton, MA, USA. I really liked all your different types of poems. The ryming one was very good! You are a great poem writer and you did an awesome job. The Acrostic poem was very good as well.
Hey! I have read a few poems and looked at a few pictures and i thought that this photo was really cool. Rose, 8th Grade Maryland, took a picture that i thought was so interesting. It has a silver iPod and grass in the picture. I can relate to this photo because I love listening to my iPod. Great job, and keep up the great work!
I read two poems Where i’m from and I am. They were both really good. they had a lot of detail and are very discriptive. I thought both of the writings were good. They were really creative poems.
I read two poems. One of them was I Am by Elizabeth. It was really good and I liked how she hinted about her background without actually saying it. I also read Kids Like Fun by Dagmawi. It was really good. I liked how there was a comparison for almost evrerything. The last one was kind of funny, but both poems were pretty good.
Shahayra Saly Lake City, Utah
I loved your piture! It was so awesome! Your pictures are so cool! The picture at night with the whole city lit up was so cool! I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I think you should become a famous photographer!
I read a poem by lindsea. It was a great poem but there were some parts i didnt understand. Over all this was a great poem. Keep up the good work your doing great
I read a poem by Giselle from Maryland. The poems title was If You Cared. I really didnt understand where she was coming from. I dont understand why you would cut your eyes with scissors. The poem made since though, it showed how you feel when you said it leaves you blind. You just did it in a way I didnt understand.
The second poem I read was by Suzannah. Her poem was great and it showed how she felt and really enjoyed reading this poem. Keep up the good work.
I read a poem by allison from maryland. The poem was great it made sense and i feel really bad for you i really do. I think that your best friends would listen to you. this was a great poem keep up the good work.
i read extension vaccuum by lindsea, i thaught it was pretty good. I really liked how it rymed in the beginning. I like your point of veiw, keep writing! Geat job!
Hi i think that this story was really good. I think that you should make it into a movie. It’s really interesting. Is this story a real story? It’s really sad.
Great job!
Christopher M from Bronx, New York.
Fabulous poem. I laughed so much, but of course I mean in a good way. It was funny and kept me entertained the whole time I was reading it. I look foward to reading another one of your poems soon!
Hannah
Giselle from Maryland.
I enjoyed reading your poem so much. It was meaningful throughout the whole thing. I could relate my life experiences to your writing, and that meant a lot. You show dedication and commitment. Keep up the good work!
Hannah
I read Gissel’s poem as well as Lindsea from Hawaii’s. I liked them both and though they were well written! You both show commitment and dedication and I could read emotions through your words! Good Job! Keep it up!
Avery
I read “I am from” by Genaro. I thought it was good! It was descriptive and I liked it! Keep up the good work.
Avery
rebecca i read your i am poem. it was interesting to read what your life is like. we also did a I am from poem. it was really interesting to see what your neighborhood is like.
I read “This Mask” by Adelle and i loved this poem. It put such a good description in my head of how you can truly hide yourself with a mask on, and how people feel that they dont want to wear a mask, and they want to be accepted. I also liked how you said “i cant be whoever i want, i can only hide my thoughts” and i thought it was cool how you rhymed most of the time but sometimes it wasnt rhyming but the poem still sounded great.
Wow, i just read the story run faster. it was very sad and i felt bad for the girl, Tara, because she never had a stable life. She was running from place to place just to survive. Overall the story was very well written and keep up the good work.
I read This Mask by Adelle and I was very impressed by how meaningful it was. I think that everyone could relate to that in some part of their life. I really enjoyed the rhyming words and how you explained that the mask wouldnt allow you to take it off. It is a very important life lesson to be yourself and letting people accept you for who you are. Overall, it was very well written and I hope you continue to write poems! Great job!
~kelly
I read My Shining Star by Giselle, and i thought it was great! I liked how you divided up the lines, it made the poem look so cool. The descriptions of the poem painted a good picture in my head, just like you would want it to. Great job!
i like every poem hahahaha
i read running something
it was really sad but well written i like it alot
I read Burnning Pain by Lenna in 8th grade from Maryland. That stinks, especially to loose some one that close in 8th grade. Your description was very detailed.
I read Where I Am From by Genaro and I thought that it gave me a good picture of where you grew up and what your life is like. I think that by adding a little more detail to your poems would make them even better but overall I enjoyed reading it. Also, ever since I read your poem I have been wondering what happened to your brother. Great job on your poem!
~kelly
i just read the story “Burinig Pain.” It was very intersting and sad. The story was good and it was well written. Keep up the good work!!!
Hey!
I have been reading sooooo many poems, but the two that I thought were really good were Stereotypes by Patricia and This Mask by Adelle. I understand were Patricia was coming from! Why should we be given a title before anyone gets to know us? We may look like a jock, but could be really smart too. I really like this poem, good job Patricia!!!! Adelle, what a great poem! I really liked your poem too! It reminded me of Patricias poem. I liked the words that you used to describe your feelings, and I hope that you will continue to write these poems! Good Job Patricia and Adelle!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
~Megan
I read Just to get this off my mind by Allyson from Maryland. I see where you are coming from and I agree with you. This doesn’t really happen to me but I have seen it done to other girls. This was a really good poem and I enjoyed it.
I read This Mask by Adelle from Maryland. It was very different from any other poem I have ever read and I liked it. I understand how you feel because I sometimes feel like this as well. Keep on writing.
I read the poem entitled “This Mask,” by Adelle from Maryland. While reading, I was amazed at how deep the meaning of the poem was, and how true the metaphor of the mask was for so many people in today’s world. I actually really liked the spacing of the poem as well. It only seemed to add to the intensity and truth of the metaphor, intensifying every line as I read on. However, I believe that the best part of the poem, however, was how easily it was to see that Adelle was writing from her own soul and experiences, and it just made the poem better! Keep up the great work, Adelle. I look forward to reading your future poems!
I read the poem entitled “If You Cared,” by Giselle in Maryland. While reading it, I couldn’t believe the fluidity of it all! Her words and feelings seemed to flow out onto the page seamlessly as I read on. The poem itself was unbelievably descriptive, and I could truly tell that she meant every word of the poem. The poem was a refreshing glance at her feelings at an exact moment in time, and it takes a lot of effort to show that so well! Giselle, you are a great writer, and I can’t wait so see what you write later on in life!
I read the poem “Where I’m From” by Genaro. I thought it was very good. I liked how you used “I am from” to describe yourself and your background. Great job!
“This Mask” by Adelle, was a great poem i read. I really liked your poem, it was very interesting and also true, I think everyone wears a mask in his/her life. I really enjoyed reading it!
I read two poems, “STEREOTYPES,” by Patricia in Maryland and “This Mask,” by Adelle in Maryland. First of all, I agree with everything you said, Patricia; we do not choose how we are labeled, people choose for us. Good work on the piece. Adelle, Your poem was really good. I liked the way you put your feelings down on paper and you did not hold back. I thought it was an honest piece of work. Keep it up.